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I'm supposed to correct them for grammar, punctuation, capitalization, number style, usage, and spelling. 1. The top five food service franchises are McDonalds, Subway, Sandwhiches & Salads, Burger King, 7-Eleven, and Dairy Queen. 3. The cooker adjusts itself automatically despite the user setting the time and temperature. 5. We rented the 8205 sq. meter building in Winnipeg’s exchange district, to many small space tenants. 7. Proper tools and modern equipment make businesses run smoother. 9. Last Fall, TiCycle installed a network to link five PC’s to its factory and retail stores. 11. In Edmonton at the Delta Residence Inn, a one bedroom suit is 130.00 a night 13. Between you and me, do you prefer a backpacking trip to the Rockies or river rafting down the Snake River? 15. The President, CEO, and three managers will tour our facilities in Nova Scotia and Newfoundland.

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1. A few small changes. I only put the sentences on here that needed changed. The ones I omitted are fine. 1. The top five food service franchises are McDonalds, Subway Sandwhiches & Salads, Burger King, 7-Eleven and Dairy Queen. 3. The cooker adjusts itself automatically, despite the user setting the time and temperature. 5. We rented the 8205 sq. meter building in Winnipeg’s exchange district to many small space tenants. 9. Last fall, TiCycle installed a network to link five PCs to its factory and retail stores. 11. In Edmonton, at the Delta Residence Inn, a one bedroom suit is 130.00 a night 15. The President, CEO and three managers will tour our facilities in Nova Scotia and Newfoundland.
2. Well, without seeing the original sentences, these looks fine to me, except 3. The cooker adjusts itself automatically, despite the user setting the time and temperature. 11. The correct spelling is suite not suit - and may be add a "$" sign on the price. 13. Between you and me, do you prefer a backpacking trip to the Rockies, or river rafting down the Snake River?
3. Some corrections: 1. The top five food service franchises are McDonalds, Subway, Sandwiches & Salads, Burger King, 7-Eleven, and Dairy Queen. 3. The cooker adjusts itself automatically, despite the user setting the time and temperature. 5. We rented the 8205 sq. meter building in Winnipeg’s exchange district to many small space tenants. 9. Last Fall, TiCycle installed a network to link five PCs to its factory and retail stores. 11. In Edmonton, at the Delta Residence Inn, a one bedroom suite is 130.00 a night.
4. 1. No comma after Subway. Spelling "Sandwiches". 2. OK. 3. No comma after district. 4. OK. 5. PCs. 6. suite. Full stop after night. 7. OK. 8. OK.
5. Looks good to me. I would probably put : after are in first sentence, then actually list as per one each line. I 3 I would put a comma (,) after automatically.5 I would do as We rented the 8205 sq. meter building to many small space tennants in Winnipeg's Exchange district.in 11 I would put $ before 130.00.In 13 maybe a comma after Rockies.In 15 I would make it Managers. This is just my opinion. Over-all you have done well. Good luck.