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At an interview, my potentially future employer indicated a few problems that are facing their nonprofit organization. After asking a job coach, I was advised to offer explanation in my follow-up letter as to how I would be an asset to each problematic issue. One of the issue is how to increase the mailing lists for the continuing education program focused on working healthcare professions in the gariatric area. The problem is, I have ideas but they require more information and/or brainstorming with them. I want to get this letter mailed off tonight, and I don't know how to word it other than, "With my educational background in communications, experience in nonprofit promotions, and knowledge of utilizing direct and online marketing, I am confident that we would be able to develop a marketing plan to generate a better outreach through a larger mailing list to continue the educational programs and mission of <company>." My job coach is busy until next week, so she's out of the question right now.

Public Comments

1. sometimes simplicity looks better or just plain english
2. Instead of cramming all of that information in a statement that is bloated and confusing, think of what you are TRYING to say and just SAY it. Instead of: "With my educational background in communications, experience in nonprofit promotions, and knowledge of utilizing direct and online marketing, I am confident that we would be able to develop a marketing plan to generate a better outreach through a larger mailing list to continue the educational programs and mission of <company>." Say: "I am able to develop a marketing plan that would generate a larger mailing list for the continuing education program."
3. I think what you wrote sounds good. But I changed the words a bit for you using a thesaurus, I don't know if its better, I just felt like answering your question. With my educational background in communications, experience with nonprofit making promotions and power to utilize direct and online marketing. I am convinced we can develop and apply a marketing plan to generate an improved outreach through a greater mailing list to continue the educational programs, and the mission of <company>
4. The way to increase the mailing list for the continuing education program focused working health care professions in the geriatric care are: 1. To include all the working health care professionals names of the private hospitals, public hospitals, long term care centers in this Non-profit organizations list. 2. Research all of the foundations where they have money to donate to this non-profit organization. Add their name in. 3. Emphasize the baby boomer has began to reach their retirement age. Every year, we will have 100 millions baby boomer retire. The more people become senior citizen, the more demand for the geriatric care. You should encourage the possible, potential donor to invest their money to this booming high profit business. If the healthcare professionals enroll in this professional trainning program now, they can have a bright future! And able to make a lot of money! This is the comments that I give you. Your communication background is very basic tool. You need to think and find substance to put in your cover letter. Let the interviewer know you can think! To be a fund raiser must be able to think independtly, and act independtly! They are not looking for a clerk, secretary. They need someone to play magic, and convience other people to put their money in your pocket! Non -profit organization is not a good field! No money. If your employer do not have money, what can you get from them. Bad industry. Beside, they do not need to withhold FICA from your P/R. You will not get a reasonable social security benefit in the end. Hospitals, Banks are not to stable. I saw so many hospitals closed down, lay off employees. Banks merge so frequently. they are not that hot either. Try to find a better industry! Try federal, state, local government!